FICTIONAL DOCUMENT FOR PRACTICE - no reference to real people, companies or records

TASK: Write about a school trip and explain what you learned. (Year 8, pupil A)

ESSAY
The trip to the science museum was realy good. We left at eight on the coach and got their at ten. The guide showed us loads of stuff, like the robots and the planetarium. I liked the planetarium best becuase you could see the stars like at night. Then we had lunch and came back. I learned that the stars are really far away.

MARK SCHEME (each criterion from 1 to 4 marks; total out of 16, then as a percentage)
1. Answers the task: the account and what I learned.
2. Organisation of the text: order and links between ideas.
3. Vocabulary: precise and varied words.
4. Spelling, punctuation and grammar.